Consider the following sentence:
The green grass was full of doctors, all dressed in their dazzlingly white surgical coats.
Now consider Sylvia Plath’s version:
The lawn was white with doctors. (from The Bell Jar)
I don’t think you’ll even have to think about it when I ask: Which is the better sentence?
But what about when I ask: Why?
May I introduce you to … The Bank of Words.
Imagine you have a budget for your writing. Every time you use a word, you have to pay for it. Some words are cheap, some expensive. The trick is to write as cheaply as possible: to be economical, and to make each word work.
Expensive words are adverbs (for these purposes, anything ending in -ly), unnecessary adjectives, modifiers (really, very, quite) and of course, clichés.
It’s not necessarily about cutting words, but about using the best words.
The Bank of Words. Make your withdrawals wisely.